Memo

To: Ms. Moody

I am going to implement the feedback I got from my partner in class by increasing the length of my introduction, include more of my duties at the tape and label factory, and add in more strong visuals and insight. To increase the length of my introduction, I am going to add more details about my actual duties at the tape and label factory. I will describe the duties and how much I disliked them. I will try to think creatively, and go against my logical way of thinking to make my memoir sound better.

My memoir as a whole will include my duties, such as describing my tape “inspecting” in detail. Also, I will include more ways in which the employees acted inappropriately, such as pranking me while I was trying to work. And how lousy the job as a whole was, which can lead to my motivation to go to college despite this summer job. I plan on making my paragraphs more developed than I usually would, since the support is coming from my own experiences, which will make me able to have more details in my memoir.

From: Adam Stern